Hey, no problem, just checking. :) I tend to put a lot of my ideas on the War especially into various drabbles and stories, so I tend to reference those rather than try to explain in non-fic. <g>
I like requiem very much, and how it shows what it's like for Marcus. How he's not allowed to mourn for those he cares for, because everybody just considers him a Slytherin anyway. There's something very empty, very routinely and uncaring about that drabble -- especially when he starts contemplating his own funeral -- and it works. I also like how only one of the twins' body shows, like some irony of fate.
Hee! Glad you liked that. :) And yeah, this was one of the things I've written where the idea of the House Prejudices being some sort of self-fulfilling prophecy during the Second War really comes out.
Or no, that's not quite right -- how you show that despite the fact that Lee doesn't like the fact that Marcus cheats, how underneath it all, he really thinks Marcus is a good player.
Which I think is actually the main reason he's quite as nasty as he is about calling Marcus on his faults during the games, because he thinks Marcus is a great player, pro material, but this cheating shit won't fly in the pro league, and to Lee, it just makes no sense.
It takes Lee from someone who thoughtlessly bashes the Slytherins to someone with a keen sense of observation, and someone who's at least willing to admit to himself what the talents of his opponents are, and at the same time shows Marcus really is skilled -- all in one sentence.
Awww, thanks! Also, tangent: I tend to have two mutually exclusive theories about Lee's (im)partiality. The first is the one presented in this story, that he's mostly impartial but just gets a bit carried away when someone commits a foul, especially when that someone is a potentially talented player--and really, Marcus must have some talent beyond cheating, or why else would he be Captain?
The second is that Lee gets away with being rather biased because he's really smart and good at Transfigurations and therefore he's McGonnagal's favourite.
I like pretty boy 'cause it's hot. :-) It is.
Good. It was supposed to be. :D Random bit of hotness in the middle of everything else, but then I couldn't resist adding some cynisism.
And I love the last sentence, because despite the comparisons between Lee and the kids he sees before him, I so totally did not see that coming, and it hit me right where I live.
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Hey, no problem, just checking. :) I tend to put a lot of my ideas on the War especially into various drabbles and stories, so I tend to reference those rather than try to explain in non-fic. <g>
I like requiem very much, and how it shows what it's like for Marcus. How he's not allowed to mourn for those he cares for, because everybody just considers him a Slytherin anyway. There's something very empty, very routinely and uncaring about that drabble -- especially when he starts contemplating his own funeral -- and it works. I also like how only one of the twins' body shows, like some irony of fate.
Hee! Glad you liked that. :) And yeah, this was one of the things I've written where the idea of the House Prejudices being some sort of self-fulfilling prophecy during the Second War really comes out.
Or no, that's not quite right -- how you show that despite the fact that Lee doesn't like the fact that Marcus cheats, how underneath it all, he really thinks Marcus is a good player.
Which I think is actually the main reason he's quite as nasty as he is about calling Marcus on his faults during the games, because he thinks Marcus is a great player, pro material, but this cheating shit won't fly in the pro league, and to Lee, it just makes no sense.
It takes Lee from someone who thoughtlessly bashes the Slytherins to someone with a keen sense of observation, and someone who's at least willing to admit to himself what the talents of his opponents are, and at the same time shows Marcus really is skilled -- all in one sentence.
Awww, thanks! Also, tangent: I tend to have two mutually exclusive theories about Lee's (im)partiality. The first is the one presented in this story, that he's mostly impartial but just gets a bit carried away when someone commits a foul, especially when that someone is a potentially talented player--and really, Marcus must have some talent beyond cheating, or why else would he be Captain?
The second is that Lee gets away with being rather biased because he's really smart and good at Transfigurations and therefore he's McGonnagal's favourite.
I like pretty boy 'cause it's hot. :-) It is.
Good. It was supposed to be. :D Random bit of hotness in the middle of everything else, but then I couldn't resist adding some cynisism.
And I love the last sentence, because despite the comparisons between Lee and the kids he sees before him, I so totally did not see that coming, and it hit me right where I live.
You have no idea how happy that just made me. :D